Slumerican502 said:

Stoic, in every sense of the word- Stow it, feelings never to be heard- Blindsided and i'm contrite cuz it was  fight or flight- And I know I ran from you- When I used to walk hand in hand with you- But understand the anger brewin' made things convoluted- Now im stuck with my hatred at the bottom of a hole- Tryna find a foothold and take back control of this- Self pity and im surrounded by obsidian- Driven by blind compulsion like a branch davidian- And I thought you're the reason my life was displaced- when you always had a hand out tryna set me free in the first place-

 

First attempt at song writing lol

It wasn't horrible, some areas are confusing but it's a good start. It works as an awesome poem though. If you worked at it a bit it seems like you'd have a very unique and poetic style with rapping and that'd be awesome. Kinda makes me wanna read your book even more when it's finished though.

It wasn't horrible, some areas are confusing but it's a good start. It works as an awesome poem though. If you worked at it a bit it seems like you'd have a very unique and poetic style with rapping and that'd be awesome. Kinda makes me wanna read your book even more when it's finished though.

 

I aint tryna be a rapper or a poet lol. I have a deep southern accent that wouldn't translate well on a recording. I can sing some garth brooks though llal….. Preciate the kind words

 

dilutid said:

I thought they had a song reppin white trash shit, whatever they basically don't exist anymore so we should just not bring them up.

I wouldn't say they don't exist, or we wouldn't be speakin' of em. Like em or hate em (I fit the latter) dudes have hustle

except the one about peruvians shootin' lasers out of their eyes….That one is true