Mug this, motherfucker:

From an unbiased persons perspective...

1. You sound like Ninja from Die Antwoord. If that's the style you are going for, cool, if not, try not forcing so many words in to a bar. Stretch them out to ride the beat so you don't sound so Mono tone homie. You have good word play with the lyrics but, if you sound like one continuous drone no one will make an effort to listen and discover that. A lot of rappers get this same hang up and overcome it by rapping over a familiar instrumental. They do this because they know the pattern of the original lyrics, so when they write their own to it, it forces the new lyrics being put down to open up and have more kick behind them.

2. Don't know if you made that beat but if you did you should consider looking in to elevating your production value. It sounded totally generic and really lackluster. The exception would be the added instrumentation in the chorus. Try adding bridges, breakdowns and switch-ups to keep peoples interest going. Producers are a dime-a-dozen on the internet, a little networking and I'm sure some one could help you on your beat making or give you some really creative beats my dude.

3. Your vocals are way to low in comparison to the instrumental. This could be due to a very cheap mic or the lack of knowledge in the realm of proper mixing. Filters can only due so much.

Not hating on you or your art just giving a honest critique as a first time listener of your music. Like everything, time and practice will have you where you want to be. I used to get pissed at peeps when they told me this kind of stuff about my music but, looking back, they were the things I needed to hear for me to improve. I put my ego aside and became a sponge. Knowledge has no limits man.