

2:54 am
August 14, 2014

5:26 am
January 21, 2014

5:31 am
May 29, 2013

5:48 am
August 14, 2014

Well I figured I'd ask before I got skewered.
I don't need a chorus cuz it bores us and whores just want cash and gold, they're real bold like Eric Holder
Your rap is whack like smokin crack with two dicks thinkin their pimps as they kidnap your mom for ransom
This song won't sell shit, I'm sick of it, being told I'm nothing because they think I'm bluffing, bitch You're dead ..."but I'm still givin you head" I don't care
Your bitch is hairier than chewbacca and needs some nair, then I'll take that hairless cunt to my lair or rape her at the county fair
At the age of thirteen I OD'd on thorazine. I fucked up my dopamine and been high so long I act clean, unless I get rude like that Ravishing Rick dude
I act beligerant, I'm a miscreant, a villain, a juvenile delinquint and don't mean any of it
When I die, I hope you suffer, cuz I'm flier than Flyin Brian and you're a heffer, whatever, your pussy reeks like old leather
Could you tell me somethin? Are you dumb or just huffin paint? [psshhh] and aint it lame that sling blades are illegal and I can't slash your face, for real though
You tried to fuck me over, so I trolled your ass like Jehovah's witnesses then tired you out with physical fitness, you're witless and all the bitches think you're a dud like elmer fud with that bill forward pilgrim hat, it's whack, I'm sorry [...wait no I'm not], I laughed when you got face smacked, eye blacked n jaw jacked
Now back to your girl. She's a hag with a bag over her face, but she enjoys a swirl cuz she gets drunk til she hurls, blacks out and wants some pearls "mmm gimme a necklace"
I'm reckless, relentless, and I gave your mom tourettes, she took it and to think she almost turned lez... its messed. so lets finish this after I get dressed, Jeff
Go smoke meth, get arrested and excuse me while I suck your girls breasts, then beat her again with a club, but I jest though if you like you can be the ref.
inb4THATSHITISWHACKin.... 5...4...3..
I'm the neck cutta and I'm one block away...
OCJ_Brendan said
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6:06 am
May 29, 2013

6:19 am
February 24, 2014

that shits whack. looks like a bunch of jibber jabber with not point, and immaturish rhymes that don't make sense
"when I die, I hope YOU suffer?"
"lets finish this after I get dressed jeff?" are you and jeff naked together??
"Tired you out with physical fitness" you trolled this person and worked out with them??
"Go smoke meth, get arrested and excuse me while I suck your girls breasts, then beat her again with a club, but I jest though if you like you can be the ref" so, how is he gonna be the ref if he gets arrested??
"Your rap is whack like smokin crack with two dicks thinkin their pimps as they kidnap your mom for ransom" what??
that's just what I feel like mentioning, but its all over dude. honestly, you some structure, and not a bunch of randomness
I'll fuck you till you love me, Faggot!
-Tyson
6:26 am
May 29, 2013

6:33 am
February 24, 2014

6:38 am
May 29, 2013

12:57 pm
August 14, 2014

LTB said
Too much emphasis on trying to rhyme every little word, jumps around a lot especially that first line lol what does chorus boring us have to do with whores wanting cash and gold?
Good points. It does need to be arranged. I wrote it in sections so it'd be easier to rearrange it if needed.
I'm the neck cutta and I'm one block away...
OCJ_Brendan said
Haha I hope everyone enjoys their Leg Diamond limited edition Beach towels...
1:00 pm
August 14, 2014

Sean Law said
that shits whack. looks like a bunch of jibber jabber with not point, and immaturish rhymes that don't make sense"when I die, I hope YOU suffer?"
"lets finish this after I get dressed jeff?" are you and jeff naked together??
"Tired you out with physical fitness" you trolled this person and worked out with them??
"Go smoke meth, get arrested and excuse me while I suck your girls breasts, then beat her again with a club, but I jest though if you like you can be the ref" so, how is he gonna be the ref if he gets arrested??
"Your rap is whack like smokin crack with two dicks thinkin their pimps as they kidnap your mom for ransom" what??
that's just what I feel like mentioning, but its all over dude. honestly, you some structure, and not a bunch of randomness
Well, Robin Williams ain't suffering anymore. The only ones suffering are his friend, family and fans.
And no we're not; I'm naked from fucking his mother.
The rest are all fair enough points.
I'm the neck cutta and I'm one block away...
OCJ_Brendan said
Haha I hope everyone enjoys their Leg Diamond limited edition Beach towels...
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February 24, 2014

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July 11, 2012

2:01 pm
February 24, 2014

3:28 pm
January 21, 2014

Sean Law said
potential is there. just keep some structure, and you will be better than the warlock
lets work on hitting that "y.o.l.o Swaggins" level first XD (remember that guy?)
"HAVE YOU FORGOTTEN, ONCE YOU SURRENDER THE ABILITY TO PROPERLY OPERATE YOUR MIND, YOU ARE THEN SURRENDERING THE ABILITY TO BE THE SHIT. AND THAT ONLY MEANS, YOU AINT SHIT ANYMORE."-SHAGGY2DOPE
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