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11:57 pm
March 31, 2012
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2:56 am
September 18, 2012
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Surprisingly much better than most of your bullshit. Still not something I’d listen to, but I think it’s a step up and my opinion is the only one that matters to me.
4:21 am
March 20, 2013
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Ok so i listened, cos im supportive and shit.
its heaps better then that stupid dance beat song you did. but you need to control your breathing, you sound like your struggling to get around some of those bars.
try writing a little less in your lyrics and work your way up. your not bad, but you trying to do too much too soon. try a few different styles as well, find something that fits to your voice and flow. your shits all jaggedy and you don't have that flow to string it all together.
also, dude, wtf is up with the picture? did you have constipation and pretending to shoot your listeners with imaginary guns? don't screw your face up in pictures (unless you want that to be your thing?) because its harder for people to recognise you. you cant hide all the lines and weird thigns your face does like icp/twiztid can because you aint painted up. try go for that gangsta lean type shit. your music seems more like a mainstream style (drinking/smoking weed) so try and look the part.
find something that makes you stand out, without being corny and use it to market yourself under that banner.
not hating on your shit man, just some constructive criticism from someone who has worked with rappers from time to time in Aus.
9:22 am
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May 22, 2012
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save your hard drive:
The Warlock rapped:
(Verse 1)
Yeah I first hit that perfect green heaven when I was 11 years old since my peers told me there's nothin to fear so I got clear stoned off that good Canadian weed thats a radiant green yo it made me a fiend I wasn't a baby or teen but maybe it seemed at me adolescent age I wasn't afraid so with my cousin I blazed & when it comes to beer we'd drink a dozen a day or a couple forty's of that O E but yo we would freestyle daily 'til I moved to albucrazy that's when I settled down shifted shape & started liftin' weights cuz I've always been fat but only with a PH & yo my blurry eyes started to see straight cuz I wasn't drinkin instead I was thinkin' of new lyrics & makin' it & yo I'd get blazed as shit so yo just please chill & listen to the rest of my story as you sit back & take a hit(Chorus)
Yeah that's just a part of my life that I wanna share with the people so yo peep the bars that I write & enjoy it like the best shit you've ever puffed on & I hope y'all can appreciate this love song(Verse 2)
Yeah it's a love song about that girl Mary Jane & yo we 1st hooked up at the very age I was in the 6th grade & I might've been young but yo I'd get straight faded & on the real I hate it when people try to make me feel guilty as if I'm fuckin with the same bitch who killed whitney but yo I'm not & this chick is allot cleana if I had to guess her real name yo it would be Sabrina cuz she's my witch counterpart & on the real she's one of the main reasons that I even found a heart through all the bullshit that's been in my life she's an angel I send in the sky in the dead of the night & yo even tho we break up off & on I know it's small & its gonna be not for long cuz we still gotta end up back together in time cuz i know we're bound to be together at the end of my life(Chorus)
awfully paranoid, arent you?
9:26 am
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May 22, 2012
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1.
sound quality is slightly improved; other than that, same old same old.
2.
your partners name is spunky killa? im guessing you guys dont know what spunking is.
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novocaine said:
Ok so i listened, cos im supportive and shit.
not hating on your shit man, just some constructive criticism
ive done those things before. turns out, both were pretty much pointless.
awfully paranoid, arent you?
9:42 am
April 15, 2013
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Do you even lift?
9:44 am
March 31, 2012
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Lucem Ferre said:
Surprisingly much better than most of your bullshit. Still not something I'd listen to, but I think it's a step up and my opinion is the only one that matters to me.
haha thanks yo
9:52 am
March 31, 2012
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novocaine said:
Ok so i listened, cos im supportive and shit.
its heaps better then that stupid dance beat song you did. but you need to control your breathing, you sound like your struggling to get around some of those bars.
try writing a little less in your lyrics and work your way up. your not bad, but you trying to do too much too soon. try a few different styles as well, find something that fits to your voice and flow. your shits all jaggedy and you don't have that flow to string it all together.
thanks for listening & the criticism fam.. yeah for some reason when i write its seems to fit perfect but i end having to speed it up for some reason.. i kinda suck at talkin so i gotta try to enunciate everything.. which is prolly where the struggling comes in some..
also, dude, wtf is up with the picture? did you have constipation and pretending to shoot your listeners with imaginary guns? don't screw your face up in pictures (unless you want that to be your thing?) because its harder for people to recognise you. you cant hide all the lines and weird thigns your face does like icp/twiztid can because you aint painted up. try go for that gangsta lean type shit. your music seems more like a mainstream style (drinking/smoking weed) so try and look the part.
find something that makes you stand out, without being corny and use it to market yourself under that banner.
not hating on your shit man, just some constructive criticism from someone who has worked with rappers from time to time in Aus.
fo sho i feel ya.. yeah thats on old pic & i just threw it up there cuz it fit the rest of the sites weeds pics (banner/background/cover) yeah fresh & original images are hard to come up with… i wouldnt consider myself that commercial sounding artist-wise tho… i try to cover everything topic-wise theres very little i wont make a song about.. haha thanks for listenin fam & the feedback
9:57 am
March 31, 2012
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scruffy said:
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sound quality is slightly improved; other than that, same old same old.
thanks for givin it a listen yo
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your partners name is spunky killa? im guessing you guys dont know what spunking is.
uh.. i dont think so.. i know spunk is cum & i suggested he changed his name back in the day but he refused to… i usually just refer to him as SK haha its original tho.. if you google his name hes the only one that pops up.. which aint easy to do in this day & age…
10:01 am
March 31, 2012
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Guest said:
Do you even lift?
if youre reffering to this line
'til I moved to albucrazy that's when I settled down shifted shape & started liftin' weights cuz I've always been fat but only with a PH
i was just talkin about a point in my life when i worked off some fat.. this was like back in 04..
10:48 am
March 20, 2013
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The Warlock said:
thanks for listening & the criticism fam.. yeah for some reason when i write its seems to fit perfect but i end having to speed it up for some reason.. i kinda suck at talkin so i gotta try to enunciate everything.. which is prolly where the struggling comes in some..
All good fam, i did a little bit of writing when i was like 18, recorded an album and i had the same problems. i could put it down on paper perfect, spit with my homies perfect but when it came to the booth it would come out fucked up.
i think its just about practice. get into the booth and do your shit as much as you can/afford.
i still say go simple lyrics, everyone is trying to go faster and more complex these days and it results in 1000s of terrile artists trying to rap fast. or try rhyming a few bars of 3 syllable words for practice.
11:07 am
March 31, 2012
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novocaine said:
All good fam, i did a little bit of writing when i was like 18, recorded an album and i had the same problems. i could put it down on paper perfect, spit with my homies perfect but when it came to the booth it would come out fucked up.
i think its just about practice. get into the booth and do your shit as much as you can/afford.
i still say go simple lyrics, everyone is trying to go faster and more complex these days and it results in 1000s of terrile artists trying to rap fast. or try rhyming a few bars of 3 syllable words for practice.
yeah im def not tryin to be a fast rapper.. & yeah rhymin multiple syllables is kinda my style.. i agree tho its all about practice which im def gonna continue to do..
4:31 pm
December 3, 2012
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There's a gateway in our minds
That leads somewhere out there, far beyond this plane
Where reptile aliens made of light
Cut you open and pull out all your pain
Sturgill Simpson- Turtles All The Way Down
5:00 pm
March 31, 2012
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cute.. thanks for informing me..
6:50 pm
August 27, 2012
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I fucks with the bitch that killed whitney…by that do you mean xanax or coke…cuz i do both occasionally…for the record it wasnt coke that killed her it was the benzos…I dont feel guilty tho i never have
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Slow down a bit you know im always supportive of your music and seek out giving you praises cuz I respect any artist trying to do their thing…the whole package is improved, but if you slowed down thered be less struggling for breath i think…
"Somewhere theres a Waffle House thats severely understaffed right now" -OCJ to Scruffy watching a second stage act at the Gathering.
6:53 pm
August 27, 2012
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Slumerican502 said:
otters rape baby seals….their the Jerry Sanduskys of the animal kingdom….just fyi
"Somewhere theres a Waffle House thats severely understaffed right now" -OCJ to Scruffy watching a second stage act at the Gathering.
7:17 pm
March 31, 2012
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OCJ_Brendan said:
I fucks with the bitch that killed whitney…by that do you mean xanax or coke…cuz i do both occasionally…for the record it wasnt coke that killed her it was the benzos…I dont feel guilty tho i never have
haha i assumed it was coke like i think most people did.. i never looked into it tho.. at least it was a drug that took her out so the line still makes sense haha jk
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Slow down a bit you know im always supportive of your music and seek out giving you praises cuz I respect any artist trying to do their thing…the whole package is improved, but if you slowed down thered be less struggling for breath i think…
fo sho thanks for peepin it & yeah i agree im a def try to write less that way im not cramming the bars
7:43 pm
August 27, 2012
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You dont fall asleep in a bathtub on cocaine….infact I usually dont sleep anywhere on cocaine…its kinda the opposite of the desired effect
"Somewhere theres a Waffle House thats severely understaffed right now" -OCJ to Scruffy watching a second stage act at the Gathering.
8:18 pm
March 31, 2012
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OCJ_Brendan said:
You dont fall asleep in a bathtub on cocaine….infact I usually dont sleep anywhere on cocaine…its kinda the opposite of the desired effect
haha yeah i had no idea she fall asleep in a tub.. coke was kinda always synonyms with whitney so i just assumed she'd OD off it haha hell it was so well known she was a cokehead i think most people who dont know the story will assume the coke reference in the song is on point haha & arguably that shit did kill her before she actually died..
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