this was good with the multies and had a comedy factor ... could have hit alot harder tho ,, maybe had a better base to build on

Cuz you're so fat it's amazin' you'd be crackin' the pavement, if you jumped but you're just another punk that I'm facin',
& I won't retract all my statements cuz I mean this bitch!, your mom can suck my penis tip until the semen spits,

again funny shit bro . the "mom can suck my penis" was whac tho ... i mean really .. u use'n a "your mom diss" for a text battle ... thats lame as try'n to be a net thug

& Everyone will prolly vote against me cuz I'm disliked, but a real emcee would know I rip mics & my shit's tight,
While this guy that I'm facin' would do good in a comedy room, but get boo'd offstage in the golden age awfully soon,

as far as the 1st line .. to clear things up, i vote for the winner of the battle, rather or not i like the person... and just because i dont know that u rip mics dont mean that im not a real mc LOL .. the punch used was lacking .. not very strong to build off of.. and the bar as a whole was again lacking

I rhyme multi-syllabics & you know you're a faggot, your simple rhymes make me think you're just tryin' to flow & just practice,
But then again I'm sure you know that you suck, you can find endless material on me but all I know's you're fat as fuck,

seems like u had something else here originally, then u deleted or edited it and changed the bar around, cuz the rhymes in the 1st line dont match up with the second, and it seems like u had something really dope u wanted to say but never got around to it, anyways the bar ended with basically u just say'n that hes fat .. which u implied in both battles the whole time, try reaching for something else sometimes, dont over use the same personal info cuz it shows u lack creativity 

So lose some weight cuz it's a huge mistake, tryin' to come at me when you'd rather chew a steak with tuna flakes,
Or should I say "sprinkles" fuck you & your people, we aren't equal besides the fact we're both people we can eat through!

the comedy seems to be your biggest weapon, u got a way to make people laugh, once u learn to utilze it, you'll be one scary opponent, and the finisher u used, im sorry to say, but "we can eat through" i feel was a weak filler multi, placed there just to rhyme .. i feel u sacrificed a decent punch for a forced multi .. bad choice ... 

over all i feel u need work on this for it to be effective, irelevant to what the opponent has to say

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Battlin a grown man who calls himself a warlock, don't know why he'll just delete me
I don't even rap but he'll run cryin away hopin don't nobody see me
You don't moderate a website, you moderate cock and balls
Goin in and out your ass while your catchin vapors suckin on halls

the metas and complexity is whats going to win i can tell already .. the vapors halls type shit is very effective no matter who ya battle

Your mother is your lover and best friend, she keeps you home to herself she's just scared you'll leave her
But you couldn't get pussy on your own if bitches mistook you for Justin Beiber
You said you won't battle a nobody you blew me off I got dismissed
The real reason is your rhymes get dumb and dumber like your name was Lloyd Christmas

i really wish people would stop with the "your mom sucked my dick, type shit online.. thats really corny", the punch used was a decent base, the set up made it so... good shit so far 

Get this, now he's butthurt look at that little bitch runnin away
To find his delete button it's up your ass warlock you're gay
If this was back to the future you'd be crapped out gettin tossed out of biff's
For puttin all them dicks on your lips, givin blowjobs and tossin salads for gif's

meh .. this was less than i expected but was effective because it dissed the opponent tho the jabs were light
Scared to respond back you're wack your rhymes they fail to diss me
The only time I saw your disc it was being used by a dog as a frisbee
You're tryin to reach the top and that's all good, I respect this
But the only way you'll reach the top is during a bad game of tetris

these bars here ... this is a battle for sure, i feel u already won the battle at this point the rest is extra credit, good bar and execution

The same website you work for dissed you and said your shit was played
Now go cry to your mama and you just might get laid
Let her sit her fat sweaty ass on your face, try to forget that you're a disgrace
No one ever took you tryin to rap seriously in the first place

then u went and did this light bullshit again LOL .. its cool tho bro extra credit remember

You're like Mase, a pretty face fuck trying to find your voice bitch go find puffy
Tell him you want to make the band he might let you watch his kids if you lucky
Fuck puffy fuck warlock his rhymes are fuckin played out like myspace
You might as well pack your shit and leave the game, here bitch use my suitcase

ha, the last line was'nt even really special but it made me laugh anyways... good shit over all 

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tips and hints : 

warlock .. u should read how pat does his punches and setups and learn how to utilize your own shit better, cuz u are lacking on alot of shit, and  PLEASE DONT TAKE WHAT I SAY TO HEART AS SOMETHING BAD .. its criticism to help u get better .. im not talking shit im helping u drop better shit in the future

pat .. try to learn multies, and other than that listen to what else i said and u'll be dope

Vote = Pat

I'm waiting on you, bring it.

its up..  The Warlock vs patjoyce *Text Battle Round 2* post your shit up yo..

PunkRockJuggalo said:

The Warlock said:

alright i'll make the thread now..

another thread shit theres already two of them

I think it's his way of self advertising himself or something, i don't know.

well i made the 1st thread cuz i was tryin to take it serious but apparently no one did.. its all good tho its the last one...

The Warlock said:

alright i'll make the thread now..

another thread shit theres already two of them

its the last thread so its all good...

The Warlock said:

alright i'll make the thread now..

another thread shit theres already two of them

I think it's his way of self advertising himself or something, i don't know.

alright i'll make the thread now..

another thread shit theres already two of them

Juggaloco305 said:

these rap battles should be on a youtube videos using props and shit to diss eachother! haha
i dont think it gets more underground than this  

I am enjoying this, I truly I am. But I grow impatient for round two.

my rounds almost done

The Warlock said:

god dammit my itouch just spazzed & deleted like 4 bars... smh...

sure sure likely story lol

lol it did.. luckily i was able to remember the gist of what i wrote...

these rap battles should be on a youtube videos using props and shit to diss eachother! haha
i dont think it gets more underground than this  

I am enjoying this, I truly I am. But I grow impatient for round two.

god dammit my itouch just spazzed & deleted like 4 bars... smh...

sure sure likely story lol