TurnaFraze said

Novocaine, The Blue Collar King said

as for trying to jam too much into lines, thats..... yeah. its something im working on.

 

What you want to make sure to do is keep your syllables in multiples opf your time scale. usually since rap songs are 16 bars its a 4/4 time. You keep your syllables one a multiple of 4 setup (4,8,12,16...) then it will fit better. the smaller the multiple the slower the flow. I find that 12 is a good even flow without having to crunch. I am tongue tied so speed rapping is a challenge. I can keep up to some other artists when singing along, but as for writing i keep between 12 and 16 per line  

and this is why ill never be a great rapper..... because i understood absolutely nothing in that post.

Novocaine, The Blue Collar King said

as for trying to jam too much into lines, thats..... yeah. its something im working on.

What you want to make sure to do is keep your syllables in multiples opf your time scale. usually since rap songs are 16 bars its a 4/4 time. You keep your syllables one a multiple of 4 setup (4,8,12,16...) then it will fit better. the smaller the multiple the slower the flow. I find that 12 is a good even flow without having to crunch. I am tongue tied so speed rapping is a challenge. I can keep up to some other artists when singing along, but as for writing i keep between 12 and 16 per line

im glad you liked it, as i said previously, if you wanna use the beat, you are more than welcome. wen all gotta start somewhere man. listening to thug romance right now.... yeah its pretty bad hahaha the mixing could use some work but your flow aint bad.

but you know what, as long as you like it thats all the matters.

If you ever wanna collab, hit me up. im ALWAYS down.

When I used to do a little stuff (and it is NOT that good) I was a lot softer in my style pretty wannabe-ish some times R&Bish actually. I sit back today and laugh at myself often but here is the link to my old stuff I attempted to do. It is terrible and I did everything with some cheap media player and ranted beats and had absolutely ZERO skills in mixing.

https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCYwTphDKpbShbHkqSwF8UFQ

By the way it is ok to say no. I am not that soft.

ALSO..As I said the beat was good and I like the flow style and feel once you evolve into your own persona more you will be fine. The whole Aussie Machete killer thing gave me a warm and fuzzy feeling. Step into my van?

Miklo Velka said
Here is my honest review.

It's mediocre.

Your lyrics sound like 300 other underground horrorcore MC's out there on the grind trying to make it.

The beat is ok, but you didn't even put in the effort to change it up an any meaningful way for the chorus.

In multiple spots you tried to stuff too many words into a bar, which forced you off beat. That shit is just amateur night.

i totally agree.

im still figuring beat making out, wont deny it. got a log way to go.

as for sounding like everyone else /shrug. if i was trying to make it i might try be a little more 'different' but im just having fun. 

as for trying to jam too much into lines, thats..... yeah. its something im working on.

thanks man ^___^ i appreciate the input :) thanks for listening! cant wait for what you think of the whole album.

It's mediocre.

Your lyrics sound like 300 other underground horrorcore MC's out there on the grind trying to make it.

The beat is ok, but you didn't even put in the effort to change it up an any meaningful way for the chorus.

In multiple spots you tried to stuff too many words into a bar, which forced you off beat. That shit is just amateur night.

For @miklo-velka because i know how much you love my music sweeheart.

i gotta start working on cover art this week. which is hands down the most annoying bit.

I'm More than curios to hear the full BCK!

I did all the work on this one myself, using the beat that i dropped for free a few months ago.

Enjoy a walk into the world of a disturbed mind!

If anyone else thinks they can do better, or love the beat so much they wanna drop some hot fire over it feel free to download and use the ROYALTY FREE track 100% free for use by absolutely anyone!