emotion could use work man, flow was ok u def sound like icp (violent j) so ur right to add that to your "sounds like" section on your reverbnation, but i dont hear the eminem style at all lol...

story was good, i enjoyed the sound effects added to the song.. lyrics could use work tho, very basic approach

ending was decent

overall song was decent

chunk801 said
@novocaine Im down man

@turna-fraze ^^ see that. thats how it happens, target someone and say ' sup bro wanna fucks with me"

@chunk801 i shall keep shit in mind and let you know. im swamped atm but itll be soon.

And collaboration YES. I have always wanted to do a collaboration piece. Hoping to do one with scruffy sometime soon. I'm sure he could help me figure out my vocal shit.

And I've never had my feeling hurt by straight talk. I might call you crazy but never get upset.

dudes a fucking beast. do some old school funk shit.

well, i gets to it.  and docs.  at some point...  got a lot goin on, today.  for once.  

Turna Fraze said
Thanks everyone. Since posting this I did some critical listening of my songs. And I agree, it sucks. Not completely. I still think my lyrics are on the right track... But I can't recall getting a lobotomy. I did some toying with my vocals and re recorded two of the songs. Neither are there yet but a far step above where they were. Thanks for the blunt and straightforward advice.

practice practice practice.

just keep at it and youll get better.

check out jiffy long for example, when he got here his stuff was slightly below mediocre, but in a short time he has pumped up his game and is killing it.

Get yourself a soundcloud and start checking out other forum artists, we are all a relatively cool bunch, just dont expect sugar coating hahaha. if you half ass it people will come down hard on you.

if you wanna work with other artists most of us are always down for a bit of fun.

shameless plug time:

This is the most recent FLH collab, i put this together with a few of the homies. always down to fux with people and i got a plethora of jacked beats, mainstream and underground.

vocals sound boring with no emotion

it doesn't matter if the lyrics have a deep meaning, if it doesn't sound good then it's pointless

think of it as dramatically speaking in rhyme form

not bad, but youve not really got any thump to your vocals, trying vocal staacking (Thanks @djscrubb !) and playing around with compression and reverb etc until you find somehting you like.

Also, as others said, get a soundcloud. or a bandcamp account.

as hideous said, do you homie. just keep cranking them out and you will get better. just don't assume your going to be able to make a living off what you are doing. i tried that 10 years ago and it failed. now i just do it for fun. 

I don't know what the issue is. On "for those above" I intentionally did not have any action to my voice. That song takes a lot to do and I wanted in natural. It doesn't matter if anyone else in the world likes it because that's straight from the heart...

However it pisses me off when I listen to mentally impaired because it needs to be there in that song.

I guess I am just going to have to find someone recording locally and come sit in on a session. Eh? Scruffy

scruffy said

Hideous said  
And don't use reverbnation as your primary way to link people to your music, get a soundcloud or bandcamp page. Most bloggers/writers/promoters/journalists won't even bother to click a RN link. I usually don't either, I just don't have shit else to do at the moment. Their entire business model is created on duping naive musicians, plus the site is really buggy, and generally shitty.    

agreed.  

agree more or less with the rest, too.  

In all fairness I do have somewhat "unique" views on music, and the process of making it.

Hideous said  
And don't use reverbnation as your primary way to link people to your music, get a soundcloud or bandcamp page. Most bloggers/writers/promoters/journalists won't even bother to click a RN link. I usually don't either, I just don't have shit else to do at the moment. Their entire business model is created on duping naive musicians, plus the site is really buggy, and generally shitty.    

agreed.  

agree more or less with the rest, too.