Just in case that was a let down due to lack of content I put another "poem" i wrote last month. FYI i don't write much but think this is the fisrt step writing. Yall don't care about my feellings either way so if you like it's encouragement and if you dawg it becomes a challenge to impress you.

Lyrically you're fearing me

Cause I'm not what I appear to be

Clearly you're a bitch already tearing see

Words causing tyranny

Cause I'm tyrannical yo, of whack rappers this planet is full

Swag jackers can't handle this flow

Imaculate yo, the tactics they show

Heart of a warrior with an animal soul

Start of a fire so candle gets blown

Take of your crown and pass me the thrown

Low and behold I'm showing these foes

How flowing street goes, while pimps be strolling these hoes

Not knowing the ropes folding like notes

Under pressure, now I done upset ya

Cause I schooled you when you didn't come correct bruh

Running through fool you know I'm gonna get ya 

With a miraculous vernacular that attacks back and tackles ya 

So ravenous and damaged that you need a hazmat to handle the

Fury of my flow so hurry up and go

Your stirring up my know

I need to get my mentals straight back to a simple state

With words I'll put you in the grave

I body em all after I drop em quick

The shotty'll call from my esophagus 

Now the only option is

Facing a verbal buckshot, Tasting what you heard from one though

Now all your doing is laying there wasting you worthless dumb twat

I murdered son WHAT

I think about now and realize what I'm asking for and hope I'm prepared. I see two blatant things yall could diss but we'll see.

I just finished writing a poem for the forum and need everyone's criticism. It's not the freshest rhyme but I tried to come correct.  It makes no sense at all and ends weird but it's some decent wicked shit. 

I emulate the wicked shit and emanate such vicious spit

It desecrates a hypocrite that defecates not giving shits

If you fear my flow with active hatin’ you get lyrical lacerations

Perpetuate decapitation

Set you and Death a date, ya have to face him

My words’ll put you in a lucid nightmare

Just verbs’ll choke ‘til ya blue from light air

Whether you need to die or have to live

The action is described by the adjective

Not H-O-K but this shit’ll make ya ears bleed

It’s a okay and safe to say the world hates and fears me

Been defeated feel the agony change to anger

A conceited killa tragically manglin’ strangers

I’m damaged and troubled, stay manic and shuffle

Debating to release you from the attic while you panic and stuggle

I wish this habit was humble but it just randomly rumbles

Causing havoc in jumbles

The voices talking and I can’t manage the mumbles

I didn’t plan to be consumed by insanity and having it constantly grab at me

So I dug my brain out my head with a spoon just because I had to see

Thanks for the feedback everyone, especially warlock. I get what you mean buy it being forced, it's a bad habit. I appreciate that anyone checked the thread out. btw I just call it poetry cause that's what OCJ_Brendan would call it. Sean law, I'm definitely not this person but dig horror somewhat and decided to write it. I think warlock is right when he says it sounds dated because my biggest influences are from the golden era.

And LTB, thank you. I pride myself on my vocab sadly enough.

Sean Law said
well if that's what you like to write about, then by all means don't stop. Theres no rules to poetry I guess.

Not really too much into the blood and guts, I just made an attempt at the wicked shit. I really don't know WHAT in the fuck to write about. Horror is easy subject matter but I'm not being descriptive enough. The only thing I think write about nicely is my life. maybe world views. nice encouragement though.

Sean Law said
dude just write how you feel inside. poetry is a form of self expression and ventilation, much like music. if your goin through some shit then write about it. if your pondering something then jot it down. just aslong as it comes from your heart, mind, soul, and balls, then you can never fail yourself no matter what anyone else thinks about it cuz its all yours.

word, that's real

entrappedmind said

Demented Smoka said 

I really don't know WHAT in the fuck to write about.

 

In my experience, as far as poetry is concerned (as opposed to rap, which I know zilch about), you're missing the key ingredient. If you don't know what to write about, you obviously don't have inspiration. Without inspiration, anything you write will seem false or forced. Once you have a reason to write, aside from the simple desire to write something, it'll all come together for you.

 

Also, one other bit of advice - decide whether you're trying to write a poem or a rap. There are major differences between the two, which probably explains why I've always been able to write poetry without much struggle, but can't get a rap to come together no matter how I try.

I call it poetry as joke because I don't have access to a mic. I think you're close by calling it a lack of inspiration. I think I know what to do just necessarily how to do it. I feel inspired by listening to other artists and feel I have a sense of inspiriation, but need to increase my drive. Thanks for the feedback!