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9:59 pm
June 13, 2013
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Tomorrow's already written for those who don't seek,
And next week is just another week that was last week,
Time flies as you ignore the lies and fight the doubt that defies
the hardened courage inside that took you a whole childhood to dream up and ride,
It's always still there
Even after you've lost
And told yourself you no longer care
It's always still there
Once you've built that courage again
Dream and ride back into that great somewhere.
"I Just Wanna Hide Inside My Own Private Hell"- Boondox
7:09 am
May 9, 2014
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I like that, that was good.
"Your girl fucked me 'cause you cummin' quicker than FedEx Air"- Sean Law
11:24 am
December 8, 2013
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i enjoyed the 1st part, the second half seemed to be like a different poem just added to the 1st
anyways overall this was pretty good, i enjoyed the multi attempts, the repeditive rhyme scheme worked tho
it made the 1st half fun... and the hook part or w.e its called in poetry, it was ok but maybe could have used that scheme again
12:00 pm
June 13, 2013
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Reʞluse said
i enjoyed the 1st part, the second half seemed to be like a different poem just added to the 1stanyways overall this was pretty good, i enjoyed the multi attempts, the repeditive rhyme scheme worked tho
it made the 1st half fun... and the hook part or w.e its called in poetry, it was ok but maybe could have used that scheme again
I appreciate the constructive criticism. Thank you. I get care free when writing poems, had it been something I was going to publish, I probably would of touched it up a bit, made it flow better. But this was just one of those spur of the moment things.
"I Just Wanna Hide Inside My Own Private Hell"- Boondox
2:12 pm
December 8, 2013
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oh so this was a keystyle? .. nice , well in that case its a bit better than what i previously stated
i give credit where its due.. and keystyle/freestyle is the most credited i believe
its props on write'n something good, but hella props for some'n up with something good off the top like that
hey checkout my keystyle, which is aptly named "Keystyle", and maybe we can collab on something in the future
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