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September 30, 2014
5:15 pm
JiffyLong
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Okay, @scruffy, and @sean-law too, I took a complete different steer on this. This track is completely different than the others as in subjects, style, word choice. I'd say there's improvements, but I also said the same about the last ones too. What about you, or the others on here. This is a complete new style I'm trying, as in subject matter. 

http://youtu.be/topdsBgbCxs

There. What you guys think of this new style I'm trying. 

"Your girl fucked me 'cause you cummin' quicker than FedEx Air"- Sean Law

October 1, 2014
8:28 am
Sean Law
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are you influence by Early Violent J years?  it could have been better if you didn't take a short pause after each or everyother word, and just flow. I guess the beat was too slow for you to do that though... I guess I can say its better.

now, I have a question for you Jiffy Pop.  is this how you really are? or are you portraying a character in your raps?

I'll fuck you till you love me, Faggot!

-Tyson

October 1, 2014
9:08 am
JiffyLong
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@sean-law 

its somewhat how I am, some of it is from the perspective of other people I know around here, a lot of it is me, but not all. So it's kinda morphed. Like, I have encountered someone on Facebook like the person I talked about in the first verse, I was guessing she was fake as fuck. Second verse, it's somewhat me, some other people. Third, it's what I like to do, but at the end, that's when I say everybody has a complete different view so it can't be perfect. Brings out the name of the track, Reality. Scruffy said my last track had no point, I tried to make one on here. 

"Your girl fucked me 'cause you cummin' quicker than FedEx Air"- Sean Law

October 1, 2014
9:12 am
JiffyLong
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And about the influence. It's kinda just old school hip hop in general. Somewhat old Mastamind, Compton's Most Wanted, who is also where I got the beat from. I can see early J as an influence though. 

"Your girl fucked me 'cause you cummin' quicker than FedEx Air"- Sean Law

October 1, 2014
9:17 am
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JiffyLong said  
Scruffy said    

this, is not the formula for success.  

  

as my blind ninja master used to say, 'the keenest eye, is that which looks inward.'  

  

  awfully paranoid, arent you?   

October 1, 2014
9:26 am
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scruffy said

JiffyLong said  
Scruffy said    

 as my blind ninja master used to say, 'the keenest eye, is that which looks inward.'  

  

mmmm that's delicious. I don't know where you got that from, but im gonna keep that in my back pocket.

but yes Jiffy Lube, us that advice above.

I'll fuck you till you love me, Faggot!

-Tyson

October 1, 2014
8:24 pm
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I think everyone's tryin to say the brown eye is the keenest

October 1, 2014
11:22 pm
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JiffyLong said
@sean-law 

its somewhat how I am, some of it is from the perspective of other people I know around here, a lot of it is me, but not all. So it's kinda morphed. Like, I have encountered someone on Facebook like the person I talked about in the first verse, I was guessing she was fake as fuck. Second verse, it's somewhat me, some other people. Third, it's what I like to do, but at the end, that's when I say everybody has a complete different view so it can't be perfect. Brings out the name of the track, Reality. Scruffy said my last track had no point, I tried to make one on here. 

ill drop my 2 cents in there aswell i suppose. its better then your first attempt but you still have a long way togo. keep at it man, i thought it was alright considering your doing it all off an ipad. reminds me of some old school rap. your only what 15 years old? if this is what you want to do, keep at it man. just keep grinding, you dont get good overnight, it takes a long time and alot of hard work to get good.

 

two thumbs up for effort though. 

October 2, 2014
12:37 am
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Sell crack cocaine to build your rep.

October 2, 2014
1:24 am
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twiztidkillaxxx2 said
Sell crack cocaine to build your rep.

And respect

I'll fuck you till you love me, Faggot!

-Tyson

October 2, 2014
1:38 am
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Almighty smack will suck your dick for crack

October 2, 2014
1:16 pm
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@twiztidkillaxxx2 

Would he give me any cheeseburgers too?

"Your girl fucked me 'cause you cummin' quicker than FedEx Air"- Sean Law

October 2, 2014
2:28 pm
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If you are young and have recently started I think you have potential but you always have to study your influences and yourself. Search for flaws and accept constructive criticism. Right now your raps are choppy like sean was sayin' but I think eventually the rhythm will come to you. 

October 2, 2014
3:36 pm
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JiffyLong said
@twiztidkillaxxx2 

Would he give me any cheeseburgers too?

Canadian burgers

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